Only because I wanna set a precedent for feedback being a regular thing around here.
Back again- what were people's thoughts? I'm sort of trying to seed things into each one so you learn at least one new thing about Em each time. Dunno if its effective?
Will say there's some lines in there I'm quite proud of too. Also Kate Bush might be foreshadowing. I will not explain how just yet.
Post by Wayne Richards on Jan 31, 2017 1:14:35 GMT -5
Another solid piece. I really enjoy the way you paint the picture, I can vividly envision it as I read it. I especially liked the part of Em throwing the wad of cash to the street performer, I'm assuming that was Hunter's and was a great call back from her previous bout. Really like seeing the dynamic of Emery unfolding.